August 2005
Technically, I slept through it all
but a wall of water
destroyed my life
into one thousand tiny pieces
while I was dreaming of something else.
Those
pieces
are
still
not
in
place.
I couldnt talk on the phone
without creating violent sobs
in between each word.
It was rumored she didnt make it,
It was rumored he committed suicide,
It was rumored they were still there...
trapped and alive.
It was rumored it was all gone.
No one knew for sure.
No one knew for what felt like forever.
There are so many days from early September
to mid October
that my memory wont let me remember.
Its funny what your mind will do to protect you.
Lives were runied
Lives had ended
Lives werent sure how to keep on living.
I came back to moldy bread.
I really like this poem! I think it is great! I usually don't like misplaced lines but in this poem, I love it! I think you did a great job making it relevant for everyone! The only thing I think I would change about this poem is on the lines where you say "It was rumored..." have that be its own like and underneath say what the rumor is. You could even have spacing if on what the rumor is if you liked the repetition.
ReplyDeleteFor Example:
It was rumored
she didn't make it
It was rumored
he committed suicide
and so forth..
Anyways, wonderful job, I really enjoyed it!
-M.J.L.